Sunday, March 17, 2013

WeWriWa o3.17.13

Happy St. Patty's Day! This is usually my fav holiday, but this year I am too busy to decorate, nor really celebrate. My sunday is going to be spent doing homework that I am totally behind on. And it will be my first sober one, no Guinness, no Irish Coffee, no Bailey's, and no Hennessy Irish Whiskey. 

This week BloodLust: Armani continues right where we left off last week; Armani is trying desperately to get Karlea to play with him ;)

Karlea pushed his hand off of her. "I know what to do,' she replied, "I've done it before."
Armani grabbed her wrist and grinned, "Your past seems very intriguing. From what I know already, you highly enjoy being bitten---"
"Only by Jake." Karlea interrupted. 
"A vampire bite is a vampire bite. And every time I have bitten you, I have felt the excitement rise in you."

Uh-oh, he's on to her ;)

So, I am going to share my pitch from Pitchapalooza for those who did not get a chance to read it. I may fix up the last line and add more. I haven't had a chance to work on it since my critique.

When Armani Foscari, sees the beautiful human, Karlea, walk through the doors of the private Manhattan vampire club alone, he thinks she is incredibly stupid, although she seems confident and brave. Any human that comes into the club without a vampire escort is fair game, she must want to die. Maybe he should feel bad for her because these monsters will tear her apart – too late her blood has already tempted him.
Claiming his prize before any others can, Armani compels her to leave with him, but it takes more effort than it should. Armani will derive his own twisted pleasure before draining her until her heart stops beating, but he will soon discover her dark desires and her recent past as a lover to a vampire; one that left because she was somehow too much to handle, and was why she was in the club that night, alone, to find him.
Intrigued, Armani must resist the urge to kill and keep her alive, determined to get her to give in to her desires, and be completely submissive to him. Together their chemistry is on fire, even as she resists him at every turn. Can he keep her human and get her to accept, what he wants to be, her new life?
BloodLust: Armani will tempt you, possess you, and leave you breathless.
So, I have to ask my more seasoned writers, what is the difference between this pitch and a blurb? I wrote something else that was supposed to be a "blurb".
Thanks for reading! And please comment, I love comments!


  1. She likes being bit. Very intense and makes you want to keep on reading. :-) Great job.

  2. Pitch is what you'd do to get a publisher or agent. blurb is like on the back of the book cover. Sometimes they can be the same. I hope I got this right. Someone correct me if I'm wrong. Nice excerpt. Bet the vampire has a surprise in store for him.

  3. I started out not liking Armani, still not too sure about him but wow, this story has really drawn me in and I can't wait to read more. Excellent excerpt!

  4. So how many times has he bitten her?
    And yeah, I agree with Brenda.
    She likes it!
    And the readers like it, too!